Desk Crits
Desk Crits Given
#1. Educational Technology in PE: http://wschoi.myweb.uga.edu/
Dear Choi
Neatly designed site with rich content on PE… If your project aims at delivering in-depth information about technology integration in the field of PE, I am pretty sure it successfully works. I personally think your website itself is a good example showing how technology can be effectively integrated in the PE education. Going through your project, I thought as if I read a well written article. I was really impressed by your appropriate use of images and video clips. Especially, using the video clips for introducing case studies to your target audience was a smart choice of multimedia. Resources including related websites, articles, and tech trends also seem to be very useful. The only thing I’d like to suggest for your project is that you could categorize some of the present menus more transparently so your target audience can read your intention directly form the menu titles. For example, you could create a main menu like ‘Uses of technology in PE’ and add more specific details in the sub menus. Overall, you did an excellent job!
#2. Travel video
Dear Bin
I liked your video in that it effectively delivers your travel story with nice music. I think your project overall is a good travel guide for people who want to travel to the north eastern part of the U.S. You used the subtitles appropriately in the right places, and also seamlessly edited the still images. Here’re my suggestions for your video project.
1) You could shorten the total time of video by excluding several overlapped scenes. To me, your video seems to be a bit lengthy.
2) You seem to use transition effect too much in some parts of the video. It might distract your audience.
#3. Fixed / floating rates tutorial: http://rojo.myweb.uga.edu/fftutorial/documents/
Dear Remi
I saw your tutorial[revised version] and I thought the background color and overall design were a lot more improved than the first version I reviewed at the dress rehearsal. The content of your tutorial is well organized and has appropriate level of difficulty. However, I think the amount of content is not enough for your target audience to understand the concepts of ‘fixed /floating rates’. You could have added more introductory information for those topics in the presentation section and provided the users with more exercise with more test questions. Overall, you did a good job!
#4. Digital Magazine: http://jtang.myweb.uga.edu/6190/index.htm#
Dear Jin
When I saw your photo in the front page of your e-magazine, I thought you look like a real model…I know how hard you have worked for this project, and you successfully developed what you designed in the beginning of the course. Your e-magazine is really inviting, and came out nicely done especially in graphic design. I also value your idea of using e-magazine as your work portfolio. If I were an employer, I definitely would hire you after reviewing your portfolio with e-magazine format. One and only suggestion for your project is about navigation. I hardly find a navigation to go back to see the previous pages. Overall you did a great job!
Desk Crits Received
#1. From Jin
Hi, Hyo Seon
First of all, I like the first screen which shows the procedure of loading the flash file
I enjoy listening to the background music, which is really proper with the content
The cartoon is pretty cool. I can not image how the authors made it. I especially like the book room environment.
The sequence of the cartoon story is organized very well. And the whole story is very clear to me at the first time when I watched the flash
The only thing I do not understand is the following words, "D-30, D-15, D-20 & D-10", which appear in the flash screen.
Overall, I really enjoyed watching the cool flash file.
#2. From Radcliffe Campbell
An,
I liked your Flash cartoon. You are so talented at art. What a great use of colors and what a great idea to have the video play inside your monitor. Your projects blends video and sound so creatively.
Quuestion;How did you address interactivity and accessibility. Maybe somethinng in the accessibility panel in flash helps. Hope that helps. Take care.
#3. From Wonseok Choi
Hello Hyo Seon. This is my review of your project. Great work.
Nicely done with Flash. Seems that you did want to try something new within your studio experience. Those cartoon characters are so simple and cute, and I love the way you represent your idea with facial expression. As you mentioned about the message of your project in your project description the story line really tells something to me.
I am not quite familiar with the Flash, so it is difficult to give you a technical comment about tools that you used. Anyway, after reviewing your project couple times I have a couple things to suggest you. In my opinion, if you add couple more slides that could explain a little bit more about the process of the Studio experience, it would be much effective to express your theme of the project. Another thing is that if you a narrative voice in your project it would be helpful to visitors to understand your idea better. I am not saying that your current project is not understandable, but you may can think about combining narrative story line in the future.
I really enjoyed your project and especially liked your theme so much. I believe that everyone in the EDIT Studio could feel sympathy that you expressed in your cartoon. Nice job.
#4. From Bin
Hi An,
Here is the desk crits I give you:
I really love your project, it is so cute! The graphic is so interesting and vivid. I kept smiling when watching your flash.I just have one suggestion: please let the little dancer dancing a little longer because it is so interesting!Overall, it is excellent! I love it!
Thanks.
#5. From Ahram
Hi, Hyoseon
Hey, I enjoyed your movie! The character and the background were very cute and sounds you put into your movie makes your movie more lively. However, I think loading time for your movie is too long. I suggest you to compress the file.
I can guess what your animation is about, but if your purpose/intention of creating this movie is to introduce what we are doing in our studio class, then I think the story should be more clear and distinctive. You can put some text indicating the character's thoughts as a subtitle. Also, the ending of your movie was not that clear. I wondered how the story ended when I saw your movie.
For users' convenience, I suggest you to put some buttons for sound and movie control. (play, stop, pause for video and audio) Plus, I think you should indicate that the user should turn on their speaker.
It is a cute movie!